The broken pieces of cement scatter as I walk accross this busted up sidewalk. Time had slowly taken the life from that sidewalk and made walking on it a burden. I almost slip as I try to hop off due to the displeasure of it in first place. More pieces of cement scatter closer to the road side as I successfully attempt to regain my balance and not bust my ass.
The branches of the trees hovering over my head, as I walk past the several trees they're attached to, are so close to my head that I am able to grab a small one and rip it off. I do that often when walking through that particular stretch of sidewalk. I snap tiny branches off of the trees to twiddle between each of my fingers in a sychronized fashion to keep myself occupied as my venture continues on.
As the amusement of my tiny branch fades I find myself trying to rip a leaf from the trees alongside the road. I like to rip apart the leaves in a way that only the veins of the leaf are still left. One after another each leaf I grab. By the end of my journey I will have made an interesting bracelet out of my leaf veins.
I place my new leaf vein bracelet around my wrist as I hit the rocky driving leading to my destination. The first steps engages me onto the final stretch to where I need to be. Lots and lots of rocks lye under my feet as I avoid the several apples that have fallen from the big apple trees scattered about the side of the rock path. Sometimes I kick them up the path for fun and amusement while I near the end of my journey.
Finally I reach the driveway of my mother's house. Walking up to the front door I notice several deer in the field behind my mother's house. They are always coming around because of the large amount of apples scattered around the path. They find them in the field often after my brother and I throw out there while we are bored. In a way, watching them eat them from the field, it feels like i'm purposely feeding them.
I very much like the simplicity and modesty of the basic idea--this is a special kind of travel but it certainly is travel, and writing about something straightforward like this makes it easier to control tone.
ReplyDeleteI also like how well you demonstrate the writer's secret--namely, that anything, literally anything, is worth looking at and writing about if done in a matter of fact way. So, those twigs and leaf-vein bracelets work very well.
One thing that will improve your writing generally is to read it aloud as an aid to editing, preferably aloud to another person. It may sound different than it looks; I bet reading aloud would have caught and cleaned up the first sentence of paragraph 2.